Thursday, August 11, 2011

Please provide feedback on my poem?

I love the first four lines. It runs well. My only criticism is not really a criticism but a personal thing in that the word 'thunderbirds' evokes images of the children's puppet TV thingy of years gone by. It maybe just me and the way I read this but if you can think of an alternative word or way of saying this I feel it would complete a poem that is excellent.

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